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Post by germangirl on Jun 17, 2016 12:47:13 GMT
That would be my first idea for the aftermath of the first trial. I don't really have much of an idea what kind of melody this would be supposed to have, to be honest. Also, it may be Abit too long.
Paths to the truth are winding
Phoenix (spoken): Thank you, Apollo.
Apollo (spoken): But I actually did… nothing in there.
Phoenix: You solved the case by seeing through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Do you know what that was?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The answers, you will soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): So that’s another unanswered question…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery,
What you need is right in my hand,
The victim’s locket is the key,
Soon enough you will understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
If you think I lied to you,
I just want you to recall,
I said this was my daughter, which is true,
Though it wasn’t my locket at all.
Apollo (thinking): But there is no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The connection, you will soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): Well… I hope I will find a new job even sooner, to be honest…
Phoenix (spoken): You can work for me, if you want to.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The reasons, you will soon see how.
Do you believe I’m qualified?
Then look at today’s trial.
It was too perfect to be all right,
You should be wondering since a while.
A piece of phony evidence,
Didn’t you notice it?
It made everything make sense,
because it did perfectly fit.
Apollo (spoken): Phony evidence?! Are you talking about that “ace up my sleeve”? The bloody card your daughter gave me?
Phoenix (sung):
The card the murderer replaced
I don’t where it is,
Or how he got rid of the ace,
But I know it isn’t this.
My daughter did what a magician
Normally does best,
If I tell you she fulfilled her mission
You can figure out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How can you do that and still call yourself an attorney?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see
Only one attorney and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): No!
Apollo (sung):
Better tell me the truth right now!
Did you really seek justice for those you did defend,
Or is it true that everything you did was just pretend?
Phoenix (sung):
I’m sure you’ll find it out,
But you’ll do it on your own,
You’ll see what this is all about,
It’s your story, yours alone.
Thank you for working things out
But you should keep one thing in mind,
Maybe you should yell “Take that!” out loud,
When trying to punch me next time.
(door noise)
Apollo (sung):
He’s bending all paths that are winding.
All those rumors were true, now I know.
About him there’s no truth worth finding,
And we’ll not ever meet again, no!
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Post by Shai on Jun 17, 2016 16:34:34 GMT
Ahh, I was waiting for that punch to come into play! Clever way of putting it in, by the way x3
As for the song itself, it has plenty of potential, but the lyrics are a little rough around the edges and could use some work. Some parts are phrased awkwardly. Awesome work so far though!
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Post by germangirl on Jun 17, 2016 18:29:43 GMT
'kay, thanks, I'll try my best! It's just that... I'm pretty sure that I'm lacking a sense for awkward phrasing because I'M NO FREAKING NATIVE. But I'll do my best. Thank you for the advice!
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Post by Shai on Jun 17, 2016 19:13:08 GMT
Oh yeah, I nearly forgot about that x3 My apologies! But speaking of your bilingual nature, and I know this is under the wrong board, but... would you be willing to write a soliloquy for Kristoph Gavin completely in German? I think it would be interesting to have a section of a song where Kris sings/speak completely in German. It's shown up in songs before, and I think it would be cool to have a part where Kristoph mutters stuff in German. What about though, I'm not sure yet but I think it would be pretty neat to have anyway.
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Post by germangirl on Jun 17, 2016 20:11:38 GMT
*totally freaks out* Oh hell, you can't know that, but I was literally dreaming of being asked something like this since I joined Court Records. Man sollte nie die Hoffnung verlieren, seine Träume in die Tat umzusetzen. ( =One should never lose their hope of making their dreams become real.) By the way, I crafted a new version.
Paths to the truth are winding
Phoenix (spoken): Thank you, Apollo.
Apollo (spoken): But I actually did… nothing in there.
Phoenix: You solved the case by seeing through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Do you know anything about that?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The answers, you’ll soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): As if there weren’t enough unanswered questions…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery,
What you need is right in my hand,
The victim’s locket is the key,
Soon enough you’ll understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
If you think I lied that time,
I just want you to recall,
It’s my daughter, but the locket wasn’t mine,
Didn’t say anything else at all.
Apollo (thinking): But there’s no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The connection, you’ll soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): Well… I hope I will find a new job even sooner, to be honest…
Phoenix (spoken): If you need a job, I could offer you one.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law Offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The reasons, you’ll soon see how.
Do you believe I’m qualified?
Then look at today’s trial.
It was too perfect to be all right,
It should bother you since a while.
A piece of phony evidence,
Got him guilty and me acquitted,
It made everything make sense,
Because it perfectly fitted.
Apollo (spoken): Phony evidence?! Are you… Are you talking about that “ace up my sleeve”? The bloody card that girl gave me? Your… daughter?
Phoenix (sung):
The card the murderer replaced,
I don’t know where it is,
Or how he got rid of the ace,
But I sure know it isn’t this.
My daughter did what a magician
Normally does best,
If I tell you she fulfilled her mission
You can figure out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How can you do something like this and still call yourself a lawyer?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see
Only one lawyer and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better don’t…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): No!
Apollo (sung):
Better tell me the truth right now!
Was it justice you defended,
Or is it true you just pretended?
Phoenix (sung):
I’m sure you’ll find it out,
But you’ll do it on your own,
You’ll see what it’s all about,
It’s your story, yours alone.
Thank you for working things out
But you should keep in mind,
Maybe yell “Take that!” out loud,
When punching me next time.
(door noise)
Apollo (sung):
He’s bending all paths that are winding.
All those rumors were true, now I know.
About him there’s no truth worth finding,
And for sure we won’t meet again, no!
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Post by Shai on Jun 17, 2016 20:31:54 GMT
Ahh that's much better! I think I can even imagine a melody for this ^w^
And I'm glad I could ask the perfect question to lift your spirits! In truth, I was feeling really embarrassed at the fact that I forgot you weren't native to English, so you saying that lifts my spirits too lmao I'll let you know when I start really focusing on Kristoph's breakdown song so we can blend our ideas and stuff!
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Post by gyakutentrial on Jun 17, 2016 21:48:04 GMT
oh man i love this!! what are the plans for a melody?
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Post by Lumos314 on Jun 18, 2016 4:09:57 GMT
...I wrote up a big post and then the website deleted it and I'm very angry. I'll try to recap. D:
I love what you have! Is also love to write a melody! Whatever happens, though, I strongly feel that the melody should lead directly from line three to line four of the chorus, with no held note or pause in between. Also possibly something that jumps around a lot because the paths are winding?
It looks pretty good as far as phrasing goes. I would change "Better don't walk" to "Better not to walk".
For the rest of the lyrics, I see you're putting a lot of focus on the plot and some focus on the emotions and the confrontation of this scene. I would referee that, because plot isn't going to carry over perfectly, and if we emphasize emotions, it's going to give our project more meaning to those who listen to it.
I still absolutely love what you've got, though!!
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Post by germangirl on Jun 18, 2016 7:56:23 GMT
Thank you for the comments. I worked on it a little again, but I'm not sure whether that makes things better.
Paths to the truth are winding
Phoenix (spoken): Thank you, Apollo.
Apollo (spoken): But I actually did… nothing in there.
Phoenix: You solved the case by seeing through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Do you know anything about that?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better not to walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The answers, you’ll soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): As if there weren’t enough unanswered questions…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery,
What you need is right in my hand,
The victim’s locket is the key,
Soon enough you’ll understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
If you think I lied that time,
I just want you to recall,
It’s my daughter, but the locket wasn’t mine,
Didn’t say anything else at all.
Apollo (thinking): But there’s no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better not to walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The connection, you’ll soon see how.
Apollo (spoken): Well… I hope I will find a new job even sooner, to be honest…
Phoenix (spoken): If you need a job, I could offer you one.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law Offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better not to walk them right now.
There will come a time for finding
The reasons, you’ll soon see how.
Do you believe I’m qualified?
Then look at today’s trial.
It was too perfect to be all right,
Which should bother you since a while.
A piece of phony evidence,
Got him guilty and me acquitted,
It made everything make sense,
Because it perfectly fitted.
Apollo (spoken): Phony evidence?! Are you… Are you talking about that “ace up my sleeve”? The bloody card that girl gave me? Your… daughter?
Phoenix (sung):
The card the murderer replaced,
I don’t know where it is,
But we know he got rid of the ace,
So it surely can’t be this.
My daughter did what a magician
Normally does best,
If I tell you she fulfilled her mission
You can figure out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How could you! How can you do such a thing and still call yourself a lawyer?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see
Only one lawyer and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Paths to the truth are winding.
Better not…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): No!
Apollo (sung):
Better tell me the truth right now!
Was it justice you defended,
Or is it true you just pretended?
Phoenix (sung):
I’m sure you’ll find it out,
Find it out on your own,
What this is all about,
It’s your story, yours alone.
Thank you for all you did,
But next time you get mad,
To the next blow you’ll hit,
Maybe yell “Take that!”
By the way, if you need me, just drop by.
Apollo (sung):
I know I don’t want to live a lie,
And I won’t let your lies become mine,
So be sure there won’t be another time!
(door noise)
Apollo (sung):
He bends all the paths that are winding.
And I nearly became his prey.
About him there’s no truth worth finding,
On my own path I will stay!
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Post by Madfox on Jun 20, 2016 3:04:02 GMT
I wanted to add in a quick reprise verse from our opener. This is incredible for someone who isn't a native speaker! There are a few things that are phrased a bit awkwardly, but even native speakers do that when we try and bend things to fit into a rhyme scheme. It could use a little work, yeah, but so does every song on this entire gosh darn project.
Apollo: It's my very first day and my very first trial... I won the case, but it wasn't really my style... It seems like the truth is still far away! What happened to lead Mr. Gavin astray?
(spoken) Oh! Mr. Wright!
Phoenix: Thanks for what you did in there.
Apollo: It doesn't feel like I did anything, to be honest. I still have no idea what went on in that room!
Phoenix: (begins singing)
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Post by Madfox on Jun 20, 2016 3:46:47 GMT
I come bearing constructive criticism!
1. Your rhymes are really pretty, but I don't always know what you're trying to say.
"A piece of phony evidence, Got him guilty and me acquitted, It made everything make sense, Because it perfectly fitted."
I don't know what you mean by "perfectly fitted". As in it's a perfect replica of the original? It sounds nice, as it's a perfect rhyme, but this entire stanza doesn't say much besides "You found the truth because of forged evidence".
2. You occasionally cut sentences in half for the sake of rhyming, and in music form, it sounds really strange. Nice in poetry, though.
3. You're not going to like this, but I feel like "paths to the truth are winding" is actually one of your weakest lines. It doesn't convey a lot of meaning.
I prefer this, do with it what you will:
This is not a truth you want to find, It's buried in deceit and lies. The curse of this knowledge is mine You will despise what you find.
Repetition is good, but we want to say as much as possible with as few words as possible.
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Post by lawyernerd on Jun 20, 2016 15:05:56 GMT
I really like your song a lot! I agree with all the stuff everyone else is saying, but you already know that, there's no reason for me to say anything else. With all these edits though, it's shaping up to be a really great song. You should be proud! I also have a sort of idea what a melody could sound like, but there's a ton of people already on that so...
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Post by gyakutentrial on Jun 21, 2016 3:11:39 GMT
I really like your song a lot! I agree with all the stuff everyone else is saying, but you already know that, there's no reason for me to say anything else. With all these edits though, it's shaping up to be a really great song. You should be proud! I also have a sort of idea what a melody could sound like, but there's a ton of people already on that so... it seems like there are a lot of people writing melodies. @mods, can i get in on that?
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Post by germangirl on Jun 21, 2016 11:10:34 GMT
New version! New version! Tried to craft a different chorus, though it'll need another title now. Maybe "Curse of Knowledge?" or "The Privilege of Being Blind"?
(Here comes Justice reprise)
Phoenix (spoken): Thanks for what you did there.
Apollo (spoken): It doesn’t feel like I did anything, to be honest. I still have no idea what went on in that room.
Phoenix: It was crucial that you saw through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Is there anything you know about that?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t share with you,
The most bitter truth you don’t want to find.
If I opened your eyes for you to see it too,
You would miss the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): As if there weren’t enough things I still don’t know…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery,
What it takes is right in my hand,
The victim’s locket is the key,
One day you’ll understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
Lies everywhere, no room for belief,
But what I said on the stand was true:
It’s a photo of my daughter, still I’m a thief,
Is that too much to cope with for you?
Apollo (thinking): But there’s no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t share with you,
The most bitter truth you don’t want to find.
If I opened your eyes for you to see it too,
You would miss the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): First of all, I will miss Mr Gavin… Er, I mean, not really, but still… By the way, I guess I’ll need a new job now?
Phoenix (spoken): If you want, I can offer you one.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law Offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Do you still believe I’m qualified?
You should know better since a while.
Today was too perfect to be all right,
Cause I forged evidence in this trial.
Apollo (spoken): Forged evidence?! Are you… Are you talking about that “ace up my sleeve”? The bloody card that girl gave me? Your… daughter?
Phoenix (sung):
My daughter is a real magician,
And did what magicians do best,
The bloody ace fulfilled its mission,
You can figure out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How could you! How can you do such a thing and still call yourself a lawyer?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see
Only one lawyer and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): Stop!
Apollo (sung):
Tell me why knowledge’s a curse for you!
I believed it was justice you defended,
So is it true that you just pretended?
Phoenix (sung):
If you want to find out,
You’ll have to do it on your own,
It’s not me who it’s about,
It’ll be your story, yours alone.
Phoenix (spoken): And about your uppercut, maybe you should try to yell “Take that!” the next time you hit me.
(door noise)
Apollo (spoken): You can be sure that there won’t be another time!
Apollo (sung):
Can’t you see your curse is harming me too?
When you deceive me I don’t want to be blind!
Do you think I want to live the lies of you?
Where you are there is no truth to find!
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Post by gyakutentrial on Jun 21, 2016 16:51:39 GMT
New version! New version! Tried to craft a different chorus, though it'll need another title now. Maybe "Curse of Knowledge?" or "The Privilege of Being Blind"?
(Here comes Justice reprise)
Phoenix (spoken): Thanks for what you did there.
Apollo (spoken): It doesn’t feel like I did anything, to be honest. I still have no idea what went on in that room.
Phoenix: It was crucial that you saw through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Is there anything you know about that?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t share with you,
The most bitter truth you don’t want to find.
If I opened your eyes for you to see it too,
You would miss the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): As if there weren’t enough things I still don’t know…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery,
What it takes is right in my hand,
The victim’s locket is the key,
One day you’ll understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
Lies everywhere, no room for belief,
But what I said on the stand was true:
It’s a photo of my daughter, still I’m a thief,
Is that too much to cope with for you?
Apollo (thinking): But there’s no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t share with you,
The most bitter truth you don’t want to find.
If I opened your eyes for you to see it too,
You would miss the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): First of all, I will miss Mr Gavin… Er, I mean, not really, but still… By the way, I guess I’ll need a new job now?
Phoenix (spoken): If you want, I can offer you one.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law Offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Do you still believe I’m qualified?
You should know better since a while.
Today was too perfect to be all right,
Cause I forged evidence in this trial.
Apollo (spoken): Forged evidence?! Are you… Are you talking about that “ace up my sleeve”? The bloody card that girl gave me? Your… daughter?
Phoenix (sung):
My daughter is a real magician,
And did what magicians do best,
The bloody ace fulfilled its mission,
You can figure out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How could you! How can you do such a thing and still call yourself a lawyer?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see
Only one lawyer and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): Stop!
Apollo (sung):
Tell me why knowledge’s a curse for you!
I believed it was justice you defended,
So is it true that you just pretended?
Phoenix (sung):
If you want to find out,
You’ll have to do it on your own,
It’s not me who it’s about,
It’ll be your story, yours alone.
Phoenix (spoken): And about your uppercut, maybe you should try to yell “Take that!” the next time you hit me.
(door noise)
Apollo (spoken): You can be sure that there won’t be another time!
Apollo (sung):
Can’t you see your curse is harming me too?
When you deceive me I don’t want to be blind!
Do you think I want to live the lies of you?
Where you are there is no truth to find!
oh MAN I JSUT REALIZED BECAUSE OF THIS SONG THAT ZAK HAD A PICTURE OF TRUCY BECAUSE TRUCY WAS HIS DAUGHTER. ORZ
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Post by germangirl on Jun 21, 2016 18:01:20 GMT
Oh... Okay...? Did you realise that he had a picture of her or why he had a picture of her? Or both?
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Post by Madfox on Jun 21, 2016 18:14:25 GMT
This is awesome!!!!! The only thing that I am so sorry I forgot about... we actually removed the locket from the plot. It was too complicated to add to the Objection song.
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Post by germangirl on Jun 21, 2016 18:21:45 GMT
This is awesome!!!!! The only thing that I am so sorry I forgot about... we actually removed the locket from the plot. It was too complicated to add to the Objection song. Uh... Okay. (Why do I feel this song is becoming shorter and shorter?) But thanks!
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Post by Shai on Jun 21, 2016 21:27:03 GMT
This is awesome!!!!! The only thing that I am so sorry I forgot about... we actually removed the locket from the plot. It was too complicated to add to the Objection song. Ahhhh wait wait what? Will this detail affect Ace Up Your Sleeve in any way??
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Post by apollojustice4all on Jun 21, 2016 22:22:35 GMT
This is awesome!!!!! The only thing that I am so sorry I forgot about... we actually removed the locket from the plot. It was too complicated to add to the Objection song. Ahhhh wait wait what? Will this detail affect Ace Up Your Sleeve in any way?? It just might. The way we have it written right now has it so that it is already established that Phoenix has a daughter. I dont see how we can remove the locket entirely from the plot because then its just like, "Oh yeah that ace was given to you by my daughter, did I forget to mention that I have a daughter cause I do" It feels very rushed and last second to bring up Trucy only at the very end. Also, Madfox, by the Objection Song are yo referring to Olga Orly's testimony? I feel like it wouldn't be too complicated to add some brief dialouge establishing this especially since it ties into the reason Olga thought Phoenix was strangling Zak.
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Post by gyakutentrial on Jun 22, 2016 2:25:34 GMT
Oh... Okay...? Did you realise that he had a picture of her or why he had a picture of her? Or both? why he had a picture of her. I never connected that!
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Post by apollojustice4all on Jun 22, 2016 3:29:51 GMT
Oh... Okay...? Did you realise that he had a picture of her or why he had a picture of her? Or both? why he had a picture of her. I never connected that! Wait a minute, how long has this remained a mystery to you?
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Post by gyakutentrial on Jun 22, 2016 19:50:45 GMT
why he had a picture of her. I never connected that! Wait a minute, how long has this remained a mystery to you? um,. a while
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Post by Madfox on Jun 23, 2016 11:23:12 GMT
The song was getting sort of long so I cut that part out so we could focus on getting from A to B. I don't think it's THAT important, but it seems like I'm being overruled here.
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Post by Saphira on Jun 26, 2016 1:17:08 GMT
I know we're talking about lyrics right now but I have off of work for a while so I could spend some time trying out some melodies on the piano, for this and some others. I can hear the song running in my head, though who knows if it's what other people are hearing XD. I can sing it, but I have a high voice so Apollo and Phoenix will be girls for my demo
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Post by Madfox on Aug 3, 2016 19:59:07 GMT
This thread has been dead for over a month and this song is definitely not finished
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Post by Kai on Aug 3, 2016 21:05:25 GMT
So, this song, where's the rough draft?
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Post by Madfox on Aug 8, 2016 18:39:36 GMT
I made a few edits! Trying to find a melody for this is a journey.
(Here comes Justice reprise)
Phoenix (spoken): Thanks for what you did there.
Apollo (spoken): It doesn’t feel like I did anything, to be honest. I still have no idea what went on in that room.
Phoenix: It was crucial that you saw through the witness’s lies… By using your ability.
Apollo: “Ability”? Is there anything else you know about that?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I won’t share with you, The most bitter truth you don’t want to find. If I opened your eyes for you to see it too, You would lose the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): As if there weren’t enough things I still don’t know…
Phoenix (sung):
To solve this murder’s mystery, What it takes is right in my hand, The victim’s locket is the key, One day you’ll understand.
Apollo (spoken): The victim’s locket?! You said it was yours! That’s perjury!
Phoenix (sung):
Lies everywhere, no room for belief, But what I said on the stand was true: It’s a photo of my daughter, still I’m a thief, Does that still count as perjury to you?
Apollo (thinking): But there’s no reason why the victim should have a photo of his daughter, right?
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t share with you, The most bitter truth you don’t want to find. If I opened your eyes for you to see it too, You would lose the privilege of being blind.
Apollo (spoken): I worked with Gavin because of blissful ignorance.
Phoenix (spoken): If you want, you can work for me instead.
Apollo (spoken): You mean, at Wright and Co Law Offices?! Really?! That’s… Wait, but you aren’t a lawyer anymore… But why? Why didn’t you return?
Phoenix (sung):
Do you still believe I’m qualified? I’d say you’re off by a mile. Today was too perfect to be all right, Cause I forged evidence in this trial.
Apollo (spoken): Forged evidence?! No… That bloody card? The one your daughter gave to me?
Phoenix (sung):
My daughter is a real magician, And did what magicians do best, The bloody ace fulfilled its mission, But you figured out the rest.
Apollo (spoken): How… How could you! How can you do such a thing and still call yourself a lawyer?!
Phoenix (sung):
In this room I can certainly see Only one lawyer and that isn’t me.
Apollo (thinking): So it’s true!
Phoenix (sung):
Knowledge is a curse I don’t…
Apollo (does uppercut, spoken): Stop!
Apollo (sung):
Tell me why knowledge’s a curse for you! I believed it was justice you defended, So is it true that you just pretended?
Phoenix (sung):
If you want to find out, You’ll have to do it on your own, It’s not me who it’s about, It’ll be your story, yours alone.
Phoenix (spoken): Oh, and about your uppercut… Next time you try punching me, yell “Take that”. It really adds a punch.
(door noise)
Apollo (spoken): Next time?
Apollo (sung): Can’t you see your curse is harming me too? When you deceive me I don’t want to be blind! Do you think I want to live the lies of you? Where you are there is no truth to find!
You say there’s something special About the look in my eyes So what’s with this pressure For me to stay blind?
My eyes are open now So I will show you how Justice is the only way Justice… With a capital J.
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germangirl
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Every day is the day to feel like a Fräulein.
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Post by germangirl on Aug 13, 2016 7:15:31 GMT
Looks cool! By the way, I'm still alive, just, er, lazy and on a vacation? However, I'll try to help where I can... Is there something specific that needs to be done about the lyrics?
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 13, 2016 18:42:07 GMT
this looks so good
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