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Post by Madfox on Aug 14, 2016 3:15:41 GMT
At first I didn't like it and then I realized that I just don't like the melody I was thinking about for it. RIP me
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 15, 2016 2:02:51 GMT
At first I didn't like it and then I realized that I just don't like the melody I was thinking about for it. RIP me THE MOST RELATABLE THING
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 15, 2016 2:04:22 GMT
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 15, 2016 2:04:41 GMT
how come saying s h i t is banned but not fuck
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 15, 2016 7:10:00 GMT
ahh hello okay so i always lurk around and read forums but i can never find the chance to jump in which is why ive posted like a Big Grand Total of .2 times, HOWEVER i have what might be hopefully the beginnings of a melody here?!?? www.noteflight.com/scores/view/1d70036415f362f169fc9558658216b2914ff8c1it's the last 4 lines of the song (from "my eyes are open now" to "justice with a capital J,") i dont know here comes justice by the back of my hand but i DO have the last lines (of the original) because its so catchy lmao, you can play around with the key if you need to or the notes but i figured that was a start! i forgot to change the tempo like a doofus until i was already finished but i feel like the uh midi piano wouldnt be conveying a lot of Emotion anyways, so heres kind of what i had in mind: the door closes, apollo says "next time?" in an Unhappy Tone and soft voice, and then theres a pause and he starts singing, a bit slower than whats in noteflight (between each line there could probably be a short pause in the vocals, and maaaybe a short fermata on the "way" between "justice is the only way" and "justice with [etc]") it depends on how it was supposed to be sung because i just kinda popped in out of nowhere wurehruwhe but the way i kind of heard it in my head was after phoenix leaves apollo feels very confused and bitter and probably betrayed, so its slower than the duet he was just having with phoenix and I SUre Did Type A Lot for like 10 measures of a Very Rough rough draft SO i will leave this here
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 15, 2016 7:11:06 GMT
the cluttered performance text isnt permanent urgh its really messy and i havent started thinking about chords yet but i wanted to add that in just to say there wouldnt be so much steady, hard tempo as it is in noteflight
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 15, 2016 19:59:41 GMT
ahh hello okay so i always lurk around and read forums but i can never find the chance to jump in which is why ive posted like a Big Grand Total of .2 times, HOWEVER i have what might be hopefully the beginnings of a melody here?!?? www.noteflight.com/scores/view/1d70036415f362f169fc9558658216b2914ff8c1it's the last 4 lines of the song (from "my eyes are open now" to "justice with a capital J,") i dont know here comes justice by the back of my hand but i DO have the last lines (of the original) because its so catchy lmao, you can play around with the key if you need to or the notes but i figured that was a start! i forgot to change the tempo like a doofus until i was already finished but i feel like the uh midi piano wouldnt be conveying a lot of Emotion anyways, so heres kind of what i had in mind: the door closes, apollo says "next time?" in an Unhappy Tone and soft voice, and then theres a pause and he starts singing, a bit slower than whats in noteflight (between each line there could probably be a short pause in the vocals, and maaaybe a short fermata on the "way" between "justice is the only way" and "justice with [etc]") it depends on how it was supposed to be sung because i just kinda popped in out of nowhere wurehruwhe but the way i kind of heard it in my head was after phoenix leaves apollo feels very confused and bitter and probably betrayed, so its slower than the duet he was just having with phoenix and I SUre Did Type A Lot for like 10 measures of a Very Rough rough draft SO i will leave this here ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ good shinto goเฑฆิ shinto๐ thats โ some good๐๐shinto right๐๐there๐๐๐ rightโthere โโif i do ฦฝaาฏ so my self ๐ฏ i say so ๐ฏ thats what im talking about right there right there (chorus: สณแถฆแตสฐแต แตสฐแตสณแต) mMMMMแทะ๐ฏ ๐๐ ๐ะO0ะเฌ OOOOOะเฌ เฌ Ooooแตแตแตแตแตแตแตแตแต๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐ฏ ๐ ๐ ๐ ๐ ๐๐Good shinto
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Post by Madfox on Aug 17, 2016 3:46:47 GMT
how come saying s h i t is banned but not fuck How come w h i t e p o w d e r is banned but not cocaine?
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 17, 2016 3:51:24 GMT
how come saying s h i t is banned but not fuck How come w h i t e p o w d e r is banned but not cocaine? i thought you were in charge of this
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Post by Madfox on Aug 17, 2016 4:07:34 GMT
Oh, I am.
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Post by CooBall on Aug 17, 2016 4:16:54 GMT
That is beautiful.
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Post by Madfox on Aug 17, 2016 4:18:29 GMT
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Post by Shai on Aug 18, 2016 4:58:41 GMT
*dabs agressively* good ass shinto bruh
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 19:35:59 GMT
Dunno if this is an operational link but i just dropped a mixtape the note you ended on was the one that i had been trying to figure out since making that melody and then last night i figured it out and then just now listened to this omfg
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Post by Madfox on Aug 18, 2016 20:02:14 GMT
Whoops? XD
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 20:36:24 GMT
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Post by Madfox on Aug 18, 2016 20:40:11 GMT
This is so good and pure omg
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 20:44:01 GMT
This is so good and pure omg aa thank you i actually just. put it as a png just now because noteflight took out all the spaces so the chords are right next to each other
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 20:50:29 GMT
oh! at the start of the song when it says "here comes justice reprise" in parenthesis, what exactly does this mean? is it a guide for how the song should sound, or is it a separate piece that happens before the lyrics come in?
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 18, 2016 21:09:14 GMT
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 21:19:10 GMT
I NEED THe klavier good shinto copypasta
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 18, 2016 22:41:15 GMT
oh! at the start of the song when it says "here comes justice reprise" in parenthesis, what exactly does this mean? is it a guide for how the song should sound, or is it a separate piece that happens before the lyrics come in? it took like 3 seconds to find the actual reprise rip rip rip ignore that question but i did start working on the actual beginning instead of the literal last lines of the song so now im gonna start on the melodies that..arent here comes justice (i listened to it so many times but im not even sick of it at all its so good oh my goddd) www.noteflight.com/scores/view/ba752bfba6c921de4837f66c3f8a37f4df22ef27i changed a few things, such as minor changes to the lyrics so they would flow better when sung to the tune of here comes justice, and i just changed some of the articulation so that it mostly sounds the same but slightly different (that. hardly makes sense dfsbd) Apollo: That was my very first day, and my very first trial... Guess I did win the case, but was it really my style? It seems like the truth is still so far away! What could have led my mentor astray?
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 19, 2016 1:21:25 GMT
update: i have chords now that go under the lines during the conversation before phoenix starts to sing, theyre written in noteflight and i tried to keep them in root position but that....didnt happen the whole way through ooooooooop here they are! (each line is a whole note, two per line is a half note, three per line is a half note and two quarter notes, and anything in parenthesis is not a chord, just the note that's written)
A E Em F#m (A) Bm D (F natural) A E (E D) A E A (C#) (F#) D Dm A
any critique on what i have so far?
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Post by Shai on Aug 19, 2016 5:55:30 GMT
what you have for the background stuff for the conversation is great! but--it just might be me because I speak way too fast for a normal person--I feel like it goes on for a little too long? like the tune is wonderful but I feel like it's almost dragging a bit. like 16 measures for a conversation is a bit much, I think unless we're planning to expand that conversation, which seems unlikely
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 19, 2016 6:02:58 GMT
what you have for the background stuff for the conversation is great! but--it just might be me because I speak way too fast for a normal person--I feel like it goes on for a little too long? like the tune is wonderful but I feel like it's almost dragging a bit. like 16 measures for a conversation is a bit much, I think unless we're planning to expand that conversation, which seems unlikelyyeah youre absolutely right lol i was a little worried bc i was like "am i thinking this conversation too fast in my head or" but yeah it does need to be shortened ill get on that!
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 19, 2016 6:12:51 GMT
done! i shortened the part that underlies the conversation to 8 measures, i think it still works pretty well. as for the rest of the song i want it to be kind of melodic and slow, but does anybody think that in general the song is too slow or is it just me? i kind of feel that way but then if i speed it up it doesnt sound right
lastly, the ritardando and then the fermata during apollo's line is n.....ot supposed to be that severe (the pause is though!) but i hardly know how to use noteflight
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Post by Madfox on Aug 20, 2016 1:46:37 GMT
done! i shortened the part that underlies the conversation to 8 measures, i think it still works pretty well. as for the rest of the song i want it to be kind of melodic and slow, but does anybody think that in general the song is too slow or is it just me? i kind of feel that way but then if i speed it up it doesnt sound right lastly, the ritardando and then the fermata during apollo's line is n.....ot supposed to be that severe (the pause is though!) but i hardly know how to use noteflight noteflight isn't loading for me right now but I'm proud of you anyways
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Sept 5, 2016 1:34:58 GMT
SO I KNOW ITS BEEN FOREVER IM REALLY SORRY FOR NOT HAVING ANY UPDATES TO THE MELODY but im kinda......stuck on where to go after the whole victims locket/phoenix's locket line, when apollo says "you said that was yours, that's perjury"
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Post by Madfox on Sept 15, 2016 21:28:49 GMT
Can we get someone who actually knows what we're doing with the locket to step in here
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Post by Kai on Sept 15, 2016 21:43:07 GMT
Did someone call for their leader?
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