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Post by skyesisters on Oct 27, 2016 21:08:50 GMT
I'll put up the various verses we have so far in the near future.
Verses Already Written:-
Past/present Phoenix
Past/present Trucy
Ema + Lana
Verses To Be Written:-
Kristoph
Klavier
Apollo
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 29, 2016 11:53:55 GMT
This is what I have so far!
KEY
2019 Phoenix
2026 Phoenix
2019 Trucy
2026 Trucy
2026 Klavier
2019 Klavier
Ema
Lana
Apollo
Dear Phoenix Wright
I don't know where you are
But I could really use your help right now
I'm happy to look after this girl
But I don't know how I'll provide for her
I'd better think of something...somehow.
What am I supposed to do?
I let you down
I can't see this little girl through
And now the whole world's I let the whole world go
Spinning around Spinning around
Out of my control Out of my control
You're not alone any more
You have your daughter
She was falling into darkness
But you were brave, and you caught her
And, if there is a Heaven
Then you go there every night
Sincerely, Phoenix Wright
P.S. It's gonna be alright
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Is this message too late
I know my future's looking bad
Is it worth changing fate?
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Is my future any brighter
Do I turn into a fighter?
Sincerely, Trucy Gramarye (age 8)
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Actually, my name is "Wright"
And, now
So is yours
Dear Trucy Grama-Wright
You'll be like the Phoenix burning bright
Through the shadows, you'll cast light
The future's flames, you'll never smite
And, if there is a Heaven
Then you go there every night
Sincerely, Trucy Wright
P.S. It's gonna be alright
What have I done?
How could I do this?
I didn't check the evidence
How could I be so remiss?
Now, he has lost his badge
And all the friends he ever had
And I'm the one to blame
Now, all I feel is shame
It's not your fault
Why was this the result?
There was nothing you could have done
I wish that trial had just begun
I'd have simmered, and not been so ruthless
But I did just that But you did just that
Lana...
Ema...
It's been so long
How have you been?
Does it matter?
It always matters.
I've been...fine.
Lana...
Ema...
I failed my exam
Has it stopped you from trying?
Would it ever?
No, never...!
Well, then...
Lana...
Ema...
My boss is annoying
They always are.
Not like mine.
...I'm sorry.
Don't be. Things have been...fine.
Lana?
Ema...?
Do you believe in Heaven?
I go there every night.
You'll get out soon, Lana.
It's going to be alright.
...I know.
I remember each line of the narrative
I've searched the chapters for some kind of sign
Skimming and scanning so justice will be mine
Hopefully, the jurists can provide
Some useful insight
So that I can save poor Vera's life
There's so much to do
We may never know
I'm not wasting time on tears
Mr Wright build this case for seven long years
Well, the stage is set
Cameras, makeup, lights
And I know I'll be alright
Whether it's my first or five-hundredth day
Here comes Justice...with a capital "J".
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Post by Oracle on Oct 29, 2016 12:59:22 GMT
Bye im gone this is a good song,,,,
Good on u aiken
I love the link on the last two lines
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Post by Kai on Oct 31, 2016 1:22:20 GMT
Holy shinto bois this is some gute Scheiße.
So is this what the MASON song will be or is it just the finale.
(I wrote maybe one part of the investigation and finished Trucy's bit.)
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Post by angelofphantoms on Oct 31, 2016 1:48:07 GMT
These lyrics look really cool! Especially Apollo's lat couple of lines- a great callback. I love it!
I do have one concern, though. The section:
"I remember each line of the narrative
I've searched the chapters for some kind of sign
Skimming and scanning so justice will be mine
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Looks a lot like the song "Burn" from Hamilton. The syllables line up almost perfectly rhythmically with the song, and the rhyming words are identical. Obviously we wouldn't have the same tune as "Burn," but we might want to rephrase those lyrics so they don't appear so similar. Don't want to look like we're ripping off anything.
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 31, 2016 18:46:19 GMT
These lyrics look really cool! Especially Apollo's last couple of lines- a great callback. I love it! I do have one concern, though. The section: "I remember each line of the narrative I've searched the chapters for some kind of sign Skimming and scanning so justice will be mine" Looks a lot like the song "Burn" from Hamilton. The syllables line up almost perfectly rhythmically with the song, and the rhyming words are identical. Obviously we wouldn't have the same tune as "Burn," but we might want to rephrase those lyrics so they don't appear so similar. Don't want to look like we're ripping off anything. Oops. If we change the melody slightly, how about:- "I've been presented with every piece of the contorted narrative Mr Wright told me to scan every line Have I done enough? Will justice be mine?" Is that any better? also is it bad i'm massive hamilton trash and i didn't notice |
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 31, 2016 18:47:03 GMT
Also, does anyone want me to make a demo?
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Post by maya [too lazy to log in] on Oct 31, 2016 19:29:27 GMT
ooooh these lyrics look good!!
also aiken pls make a demo i will love you
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 31, 2016 19:29:47 GMT
Holy shinto bois this is some gute Scheiße. So is this what the MASON song will be or is it just the finale. (I wrote maybe one part of the investigation and finished Trucy's bit.) I think this would just be the finale. I mean, the "songception" thing is a great idea. Perhaps we could release it as a 'MASON Medley' in various parts, but have this as a unique song. |
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Post by Shai on Oct 31, 2016 20:04:34 GMT
Love these lyrics, as in LOVE IT. Love it so much that I may or may not cry right now.
M'kay so the only issue I have is that Lana kinda comes out of nowhere and while it pains me to say it, we have no confirmation that she's alive or not or whatever (or do we??? coz I wouldn't know nor remember), so it might be best to leave her out of this.
And now that I look at the lyrics more carefully, the relationship between the two isn't really clear, so to a listener who has no idea who Lana is, she may seem insignificant and unnecessary to the verse.
I'm also a bit ??? iffy on the heaven part??? Like I love it but,,,,something seems off about making that the recurring topic in this song.
Ohmigosh I wrote too much ksbdkdbxj
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 31, 2016 20:12:33 GMT
Love these lyrics, as in LOVE IT. Love it so much that I may or may not cry right now. M'kay so the only issue I have is that Lana kinda comes out of nowhere and while it pains me to say it, we have no confirmation that she's alive or not or whatever (or do we??? coz I wouldn't know nor remember), so it might be best to leave her out of this. And now that I look at the lyrics more carefully, the relationship between the two isn't really clear, so to a listener who has no idea who Lana is, she may seem insignificant and unnecessary to the verse. I'm also a bit  iffy on the heaven part??? Like I love it but,,,,something seems off about making that the recurring topic in this song. Ohmigosh I wrote too much ksbdkdbxjOkay, so let's recap. We should probably remove Lana, because she isn't necessary, and her role is vague. In that case, is it worth creating a verse for Ema? I only included her because in the game, she says quite a bit in court, but that's cut short in A Single Page. The heaven part was just an idea I had, but you're right. It's not really related to the song, and it would be worthwhile to find a substitute. Anything else anyone would like to add before I rewrite the lyrics? |
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Post by angelofphantoms on Oct 31, 2016 20:55:32 GMT
These lyrics look really cool! Especially Apollo's last couple of lines- a great callback. I love it! I do have one concern, though. The section: "I remember each line of the narrative I've searched the chapters for some kind of sign Skimming and scanning so justice will be mine" Looks a lot like the song "Burn" from Hamilton. The syllables line up almost perfectly rhythmically with the song, and the rhyming words are identical. Obviously we wouldn't have the same tune as "Burn," but we might want to rephrase those lyrics so they don't appear so similar. Don't want to look like we're ripping off anything. Oops. If we change the melody slightly, how about:- "I've been presented with every piece of the contorted narrative Mr Wright told me to scan every line Have I done enough? Will justice be mine?" Is that any better? also is it bad i'm massive hamilton trash and i didn't noticeThat looks a lot better! And it's fine. I put subconscious references in my writing all the time.  |
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Post by SkyeSisters (Mobile) on Oct 31, 2016 21:05:48 GMT
Oops. If we change the melody slightly, how about:- "I've been presented with every piece of the contorted narrative Mr Wright told me to scan every line Have I done enough? Will justice be mine?" Is that any better? also is it bad i'm massive hamilton trash and i didn't noticeThat looks a lot better! And it's fine. I put subconscious references in my writing all the time. first it's really annoying that I can't log in on my phone SECOND what should we do for Kristoph's verse? |
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Post by skyesisters on Oct 31, 2016 21:15:53 GMT
Is Kristoph still having a waltz motif? If so, I could probably come up with something.
also it turns out I can log in on my phone
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Post by Kai on Oct 31, 2016 22:20:04 GMT
Is Kristoph still having a waltz motif? If so, I could probably come up with something. also it turns out I can log in on my phone Yeah, if Kristoph has a motif, it will have a waltz-like feel. Or just something graceful and elegant in general. |
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Post by skyesisters on Nov 1, 2016 18:59:05 GMT
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Post by Kai on Nov 1, 2016 20:08:48 GMT
A THOUSAND LIKES FOR YOU THIS IS AMAZING! lol now I have to write too XD MADFOX SKYESISTERS MUST BE THE NEXT MINION OF THE WEEK. OK, I will admit I actually cried a little JUST A LITTLE |
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Post by Oracle on Nov 1, 2016 22:59:06 GMT
AIKEN YOU KNOW HOW MUCH I LOVE YOUR SINGING AND I Am GONE
THIS SI S !!!!!! sO GOOD???????
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
dont worry kai i am also crying a lil' bit
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Post by Shai on Nov 2, 2016 5:39:28 GMT
IM CRYIGN AIKEN YOU'RE LITERALLY OUR HERO YOU'RE AMAZING OFAHLDFJASD,,,,,
but alas, we'll need madfox or kai to make an official announcement™ about the pronunciations of all the weird-ass names in this game so we can make it consistent at least throughout the whole musical coz fuckign,,,,gramarye
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Post by Oracle on Nov 2, 2016 9:32:10 GMT
I like the way aiken does it, it's different, and the actual pronunciation doesn't sound right XD
also Ema is.... EE-ma, glad aiken agrees with me
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Post by skyesisters on Nov 2, 2016 13:44:35 GMT
Yes, that's probably best, Shai.
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Post by apollojustice4all on Nov 2, 2016 14:24:27 GMT
Some thoughts:
First off: DAMN ITS GOOD
Second :In Ema's section, I think we should have AJ Ema start by either writing a letter to Lana(something like Dear Sister... so it won't be as direct for Lana to be a character) or just have Ema talking to herself, but AJ Ema would be going on about failing at what she wanted to do. Then past Ema would come in (Dear Detective Ema Skye...) and she would be the one telling AJ Ema that it's going to be alright (I may not know what the future holds/ but I know you and I'm sure you'll be alright). Just to change it up from having the AJ character telling their past counterpart that it was going to be alright.
Also, the line "I'm not wasting time on tears
Mr Wright build this case for seven long years"
Is another line you may have accidentally taken from Hamilton cause that's from Who Lives Who Dies Who Tells Your Story
"I stop wasting time on tears/
I live another fifty years"
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Post by skyesisters on Nov 2, 2016 17:22:50 GMT
Some thoughts: First off: DAMN ITS GOOD Second :In Ema's section, I think we should have AJ Ema start by either writing a letter to Lana(something like Dear Sister... so it won't be as direct for Lana to be a character) or just have Ema talking to herself, but AJ Ema would be going on about failing at what she wanted to do. Then past Ema would come in (Dear Detective Ema Skye...) and she would be the one telling AJ Ema that it's going to be alright (I may not know what the future holds/ but I know you and I'm sure you'll be alright). Just to change it up from having the AJ character telling their past counterpart that it was going to be alright. Also, the line "I'm not wasting time on tears Mr Wright build this case for seven long years" Is another line you may have accidentally taken from Hamilton cause that's from Who Lives Who Dies Who Tells Your Story "I stop wasting time on tears/ I live another fifty years" Thanks for the advice on Ema's part - I'll work on it as soon as I get home. Also, thanks for pointing that out regarding the lyrics. I keep making this mistake with lyrics. Luckily, they're noticeable enough. I'll probably change it to something like:- "Mr Wright build this case for a long time I can't quit now - I know I'm gonna be fine." and thanks to everyone for the praise! |
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Post by skyesisters on Nov 2, 2016 18:58:59 GMT
Updated lyrics!
Dear Phoenix Wright
I don't know where you are
But I could really use your help right now
I'm happy to look after this girl
But I don't know how I'll provide for her
I'd better think of something...somehow.
What am I supposed to do?
I let you down
I can't see this little girl through
And now the whole world's I let the whole world go
Spinning around Spinning around
Out of my control Out of my control
You're not alone any more
You have your daughter
She was falling into darkness
But you were brave, and you caught her
And you're still searching for the truth
You won't stop 'til it's in sight
Sincerely, Phoenix Wright
P.S. It's gonna be alright
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Is this message too late
I know my future's looking bad
Is it worth changing fate?
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Is my future any brighter
Do I turn into a fighter?
Sincerely, Trucy Gramarye (age 8)
Dear Trucy Gramarye
Actually, my name is "Wright"
And, now
So is yours
Dear Trucy Grama-Wright
You'll be like the Phoenix burning bright
Through the shadows, you'll cast light
The future's flames, you'll never smite
And you're still searching for the truth
You won't stop 'til it's in sight
Sincerely, Trucy Wright
P.S. It's gonna be alright
What have I done?
How could I do this?
I didn't check the evidence
How could I be so remiss?
Now, he has lost his badge
And all the friends he ever had
And I'm the one to blame
Now, all I feel is shame
It's not your fault
Why was this the result?
There was nothing you could have done
I wish that trial had just begun
I'd have simmered, and not been so ruthless
But I did just that But you did just that
I'll have to make it up to him
I'll search for the truth with Herr Justice
I'm sorry, Herr Wright
I promise you - I'll make thing alright
My goodness, Detective Skye
You've made your life depressing and awry
How could this happen?
I wanted to do what's right
I didn't give up without a fight
But now...my future has shattered.
It's all over (Why does it have to be over?)
I'm out of luck (Oh, don't you DARE give up!)
I'm fallen down (You can turn it around)
I've given up all hope / So don't give up hope!
Dear Detective Ema Skye
To your dreams, never say "goodbye"
I know I'll be where you are someday
But, believe me when I say
Dear Detective Ema Skye
Don't give up 'til the truth's in sight
I may not know what the future holds
But I know you, and I know you'll be alright
I've been presented with every shard of the contorted narrative
Mr Wright told me to scan every line
Will all of this mean that justice will be mine?
Hopefully, the jurists can provide
Some useful insight
So that I can save poor Vera's life
Is perceiving enough?
Will the evidence be enough?
Will it all be enough?
Mr Wright build this case for a long time
I can't quit now - I know I'm gonna be fine
Well, the stage is set
Cameras, makeup, lights
And I know I'll be alright
Whether it's my first or five-hundredth day
Here comes Justice...with a capital "J".
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iffy on the heaven part??? Like I love it but,,,,something seems off about making that the recurring topic in this song.
