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Post by Oracle on Dec 19, 2016 0:12:57 GMT
title suggested by Dominic/Temsik
- Typewriter sounds along with the vocals?
This song is based on the first trial segment
KEY KLAVIER JUDGE APOLLO BRUSHEL
[Spoken] Court is now in session for the trial of Vera Misham. Today's trial is unlike any that this courtroom has ever seen, it will enforce a new jurist system. There is a jury, watching from a separate room, and their vote will decide on the verdict. Your opening statement please, Prosecutor Gavin?
Renowned artist Drew Misham was the victim, The killer had to be his daughter, she knew'im [combo of the word knew and him] Prosecutor Gavin, I'm sure you're aware Only the cup's rim was poisoned, the rest was bare
[spoken] Of course, Herr Forehead. Here, I should give you a copy of the autopsy report. [spoken] I trust you have a witness, Mister Gavin? [spoken] Of course, Herr Judge. The prosecution calls its first witness.
SPARK BRUSHEL ENTERS THE COURTROOM
[Spoken] Good morning Mister Judge, the jury, and to you two lawyers also, end quote! [Spoken] Would the witness state his name and occupation? [spoken] Spark Brushel, independent press reporter and witness to the crime, end quote.
WIP
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 19, 2016 17:43:49 GMT
I tried to flesh what you had out a little. Here's what I have so far.
KEY: Klav Judge Pollo Trucy
This court is now in session for the trial of Vera Misham. Today's trial is unlike any that this courtroom has ever seen, it will enforce a new jurist system. There is a jury, watching from a separate room, and their vote will decide on the verdict. Your opening statement please, Prosecutor Gavin?
Danke, Herr Judge.
Jury, take notes, for I'm afraid That this trial will reach a verdict that's already been displayed By the crime scene - es tut mir leid But it's a fact that Drew Misham died
And I can say without a doubt that the one in the wrong Is sat in the throne of the guilty - where she belongs Mr Gavin seems pretty determined today Well, he'll soon find out not everything can go his way
OBJECTION! Prosecutor Gavin, you forget That you say she brought them tea, and that makes her the prime suspect But the poison wasn't found within Traces were only found on the rim!
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Post by Oracle on Dec 19, 2016 18:12:58 GMT
Thanks for this update Kurtis,
I think that Klavier's first four lines sound a bit... odd, if anything? Like there's something about them that doesn't quite sit right in my opinion? I think maybe its the last three lines, the first of the three being longer, and then the second and third almost feel...almost unnecessary?
However, apologies if i sound nitpicky, the second and third verses are good to continue on with Brushel's testimony!
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Dec 19, 2016 18:50:45 GMT
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 19, 2016 18:50:45 GMT
Thanks for this update Kurtis, I think that Klavier's first four lines sound a bit... odd, if anything? Like there's something about them that doesn't quite sit right in my opinion? I think maybe its the last three lines, the first of the three being longer, and then the second and third almost feel...almost unnecessary? However, apologies if i sound nitpicky, the second and third verses are good to continue on with Brushel's testimony! Thanks for the advice. How about the following? K: Jurists, pay attention - this is important A Drew Misham was the victim; can this story be shortened? Well, let's see - ach, here we are The defendant killed him - das ist richtig, ja? The fact is, I have a witness (A: Well, that's no surprise) And he's decisive - Herr Forehead, es tut mir leid "Please! It wasn't me!" the defendant cried But she served her father coffee - he drank it - he died A: OBJECTION! Prosecutor Gavin, you're mistaken Yeah, she made the drink, but look at her - she's clearly shaken! Besides, the deadly poison wasn't even found within TAKE THAT! Atroquinine was only found on the rim! Any better? I hope so.
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Post by Oracle on Dec 19, 2016 22:33:34 GMT
OOH! that is much better, I really like this new bit you've added! So does that mean now we have
the judge's opening
K: Jurists, pay attention - this is important A Drew Misham was the victim; can this story be shortened? Well, let's see - ach, here we are The defendant killed him - das ist richtig, ja?
The fact is, I have a witness (A: Well, that's no surprise) And he's decisive - Herr Forehead, es tut mir leid "Please! It wasn't me!" the defendant cried But she served her father coffee - he drank it - he died
A: OBJECTION! Prosecutor Gavin, you're mistaken Yeah, she made the tea, but look at her - she's clearly shaken! Besides, the deadly poison wasn't even found within TAKE THAT! Atroquinine was only found on the rim!
then, the bit i already had?
[spoken] Of course, Herr Forehead. Here, I should give you a copy of the autopsy report. [spoken] I trust you have a witness, Mister Gavin? [spoken] Of course, Herr Judge. The prosecution calls its first witness.
SPARK BRUSHEL ENTERS THE COURTROOM
[Spoken] Good morning Mister Judge, the jury, and to you two lawyers also, end quote! [Spoken] Would the witness state his name and occupation? [spoken] Spark Brushel, independent press reporter and witness to the crime, end quote.
ill probably work more on brushel's actual testimony tomorrow : P
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Dec 20, 2016 19:07:59 GMT
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 20, 2016 19:07:59 GMT
B: I visited the studio at 9 on the dot I was the first to enter there, believe it or not His daughter brought us drinks, though the beverage of note Was his, as - when he drank it - "Star Falls!", end quote.
J: [spoken] Hmm...that does sound simple.
B: [spoken] It was! "Reporter sees nobody else enter room," end quote!
A: Mr Brushel, do you remember the exact moment of death?
B: Sure I do! "Reporter keeps his eyes on the prize," end quote! He had one sip of that coffee, if that. The next moment, he was on the floor!
A: OBJECTION!
[sung] Your Honour, do you remember What Prosecutor Gavin told us about the Poison which killed Mr Misham? (J: [spoken] Mr Justice, of course I remember...)
Well, there was a fatal omission What he told us was right - but, in addition It's slow acting - death wouldn't occur when (slightly quieter) Mr Misham consumed the poison...
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Post by Oracle on Dec 20, 2016 20:03:21 GMT
KURTIS THIS IS GOOD!!!! *dABS* I LOVE IT???
wait do you want me to copy over my notes on this trial segment so its more convenient to find?
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Dec 20, 2016 21:55:23 GMT
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 20, 2016 21:55:23 GMT
KURTIS THIS IS GOOD!!!! *dABS* I LOVE IT??? wait do you want me to copy over my notes on this trial segment so its more convenient to find? If you don't mind, that would be rather useful, ja.
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Dec 21, 2016 9:53:28 GMT
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 21, 2016 9:53:28 GMT
B: [spoken] Whatwhatwhatwhat?!
A: According to a certain forensic scientist...
E: (flashback to Studious Investigations) It's one of the most dangerous poisons - however Absorbing it is quite the endeavor It takes 15 minutes from the time of the consumption To receive its effects - so is science's assumption
A: [spoken] Therefore, if Mr Misham was really poisoned as he drank his coffee - he would have had time to finish it!
(courtroom murmur)
/GAVEL GAVEL GAVEL/
J: Order! Order! Why, if that's true...it contradicts everything we've been told so far!
A: Mr Brushel, do you have anything to say...for the record?
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Post by Oracle on Dec 21, 2016 11:03:03 GMT
heres the information about the case which we need for this song : 3
The judge manages a speech about the consequences of this trial on the legal system, as a test for the Jurist system. There are cameras in the room, and they will base their choice on feelings and common sense.
Klavier opens the case, and Apollo adds that only the mug was poisoned, not the coffee. Autopsy report is submitted, then Brushel is called. He said he exchanged his testimony for exclusive rights to the story of Drew’s death.
Brushel claims he had began the interview at 9PM, Vera had served Drew his coffee and then Drew had died. Nobody else had been in the room. Apollo queries about the victim’s coffee, and Brushel states that Drew “had taken a mere sip” and then “died immediately”.
Apollo notices the contradiction in the statement, he brings up the slow-acting nature of atroquinine, and prosecutor Gavin gives Brushel a warning and then claims that the case wouldn’t be simple after all.
Brushel then testifies to seeing Drew writing a letter before the interview, Apollo presses him on this and Brushel elaborates that he arrived at 8:45 PM which had caused Drew to hastily hide the letter.
Apollo informs the court that only a red envelope had been found at the scene and that the letter from seven years ago had been sent to Drew, not from him. Brushel said Drew had to find a stamp to stick to the envelope and then he had posted it into his letterbox.
The judge reads the contents of the red envelope, and asks Brushel about how he was able to get an interview.
Brushel admits he had blackmailed Drew using the story of a case from seven years ago.
Apollo picks up on Brushel’s armpits sweating with nervousness as he talks about Drew’s Talent, which Brushel then revealed as making forgeries of paintings and evidence. He then discloses that the payment had been for forged evidence.
Prosecutor Gavin didn’t relent, there was no evidence Drew had been in contact with criminals and he claimed that envelope had nothing to do with the case. The judge lets Brushel redeem his reliability by getting him to testify again.
Brushel insists nothing had left the studio during the interview, which Apollo cuts down by proving something had left in the letterbox, whilst Prosecutor Gavin tried to claim that it as irrelevant and made no difference.
Apollo points out that Drew had licked the stamp. He then proposes the theory that Drew had licked a poisoned stamp and had transferred the poison to the mug when he went to drink from it.
However, no stamps were found at the crime scene, and Brushel says he didn’t remember Drew finding a stamp. Apollo then points out the tiny frame at the crime scene, and then proposes the stamp had been in there, because the frame had traces of Atroquinine on it. He says the stamp was a perfect weapon to kill a recluse who relied on his mail to communicate with the outside world, the red envelope had carried the stamp and the sender had instructed Drew to use the stamp when replying. Klavier claimed this coincidence could be true, and asked for proof the stamp had arrived in the red envelope.
Klavier then hears Kristoph’s voice telling him “Stop pestering the defense” but then it turns out to be Ema Skye doing an impression of him. Helpfully, she had brought her Atroquinine Detection Spray to solve the problem. Residue was present on the letter, which led Gavin to question why the murder hadn’t occurred sooner, and Ema proposed that Drew had figured out it was poisoned. Gavin disagreed, finding it to be strange he fell for it now if he didn’t before.
This created a fatal flaw in Apollo’s case, but he was still sure he had the case. He claims one of the clues the court had was a fake, Drew Misham himself. He then exposes Vera as the real forger.
Vera is called to the witness stand, and when she is questioned about her identity, she didn’t reply and just stared at Prosecutor Gavin intently before replying, saying she was the true forger.
The court is sent into uproar, prompting the judge to call a ten minute recess.
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Dec 21, 2016 19:56:13 GMT
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Post by skyesisters on Dec 21, 2016 19:56:13 GMT
can we please have a tap dance solo in this song
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Post by Oracle on Dec 21, 2016 20:57:21 GMT
YES we can kurtis don't worry
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