skyeknight
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Post by skyeknight on Aug 6, 2016 22:35:19 GMT
iwasthevictim - 8_6_16 3.19 PM.m4a (549.63 KB) hey all!! gyakutentrial and i are working on the melody for this song, and here's a segment we have down!! sorry for the background noises, we're at coffee bean whoops,
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 6, 2016 22:47:22 GMT
good post OP i love it
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 6, 2016 22:53:43 GMT
good post op you are doing good i love and support u :^)
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skyeknight
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Post by skyeknight on Aug 6, 2016 23:09:51 GMT
tfw u listen to the song again n u realize one of the notes u sang was wonky whoopsie
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skyeknight
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Post by skyeknight on Aug 6, 2016 23:10:09 GMT
and also thank u gyakutentrial >:3c
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Post by gyakutentrial on Aug 6, 2016 23:42:03 GMT
great post again from skyenight
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skyeknight
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Post by skyeknight on Aug 7, 2016 2:09:29 GMT
im screaming
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Post by Lumos314 on Aug 18, 2016 23:51:44 GMT
View Attachmenthey all!! gyakutentrial and i are working on the melody for this song, and here's a segment we have down!! sorry for the background noises, we're at coffee bean whoops, So, uh, MadFox and I have taken this snippet and molded it into something longer and with chords. I'll make her post it, and let us know what you guys think!
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Post by Madfox on Aug 18, 2016 23:52:51 GMT
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Post by spaceballsupreme on Aug 19, 2016 0:09:11 GMT
i really like this, but i have a few things to suggest: -maybe put "and" in front of "the truth will be found" to match up with the sixteenth note there, + "and THEN i'll end this all" -it seems like theres being emphasis put on "the" in the line "all i can do is play the cards in my hand" and it sounds strange to me (but idk if it does to anyone else?) its hard to say exactly what i mean just typing it out but, basically keep the emphasis on the 1 and 4 when you count to six ...that seems like its making a whole lot of Not Sense so i drew it (i left the first two lines alone because they sound fine to me)
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Post by Lumos314 on Aug 19, 2016 0:13:48 GMT
Oooh, I may have not quite finished typing out that measure. XD Sorry about that!
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Post by Lumos314 on Aug 19, 2016 0:14:31 GMT
Thanks for your input, though! I'll make sure to look at that other section!
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skyeknight
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Post by skyeknight on Aug 19, 2016 0:29:09 GMT
yO this sounds super cool? im screaming different key than what i was writing in but stILL RAD
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Post by Lumos314 on Aug 22, 2016 3:32:47 GMT
So... I made some more adjustments that MadFox doesn't know about since I sent her back to the dark place I kidnapped her from. XD But, yeah. Ignore everything after the retardando, because that's just fiddling around and saving melodies. But the rest should be good for the moment! It also involved a few lyric changes that MadFox and I kind of talked about. Most of it is just adding/subtracting/rewording minor things. The major change is in stanza three: "Innocence greeted with manipulation I earned his trust with misinformation He was an orphan so I took him in Not for his good but for mine! Isn't this a story I've heard before?" is changed to: "Innocence greeted with manipulation I earned his trust with misinformation But in this situation I think anyone would I was doing this for his own… Spoken: Ruin. Haven’t I heard this story before?"
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Post by Lumos314 on Aug 23, 2016 3:07:39 GMT
More major changes to the score. Also: "But in this situation I think anyone would I was doing this for his own...
Spoken: What am I saying? This is all wrong... Haven't I heard this story before?"
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Post by Madfox on Sept 15, 2016 21:21:37 GMT
I'd like to hear him say, "No... This was for MY good."
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Post by gyakutentrial on Sept 23, 2016 4:02:07 GMT
More major changes to the score. Also: "But in this situation I think anyone would I was doing this for his own... Spoken: What am I saying? This is all wrong... Haven't I heard this story before?" i think this is a good idea for a spoken line
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Post by gyakutentrial on Sept 23, 2016 4:02:54 GMT
we can't have all the important parts be in dialouge though!! its gotta be sung otherwise whats the point
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Post by Madfox on Sept 27, 2016 20:51:21 GMT
The idea of the spoken line was to break the train of thought. Phoenix has been doing what he thinks is the right thing without considering the consequences, and once his brain catches up to his mouth, he stops. He was doing this for good, right? But whose good?
That's why it's important to break the song with an important piece of dialogue.
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Post by gyakutentrial on Sept 28, 2016 4:34:46 GMT
The idea of the spoken line was to break the train of thought. Phoenix has been doing what he thinks is the right thing without considering the consequences, and once his brain catches up to his mouth, he stops. He was doing this for good, right? But whose good? That's why it's important to break the song with an important piece of dialogue. that makes a lot of sense. we'll try it out and see how it goes.
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