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Post by apollojustice4all on May 12, 2016 1:52:13 GMT
This is my idea for the court recess song that sort of fuses the two recess's into one. First, Kristoph gives Apollo some bad advice. Then, Phoenix gives Apollo some better advice. Lastly, Trucy gives Apollo something that's illegal.
Ace up your sleeve:
Kristoph: (Sung) Mr. Wright killed the victim The witness Insists this We know better don't we, Justice? The crime that she committed Your client shall be acquitted Orly don't play so naive It's clear she must have killed him Acuse her. That's how you'll win And that's the ace that's up your sleeve (Spoken) Well, I have something to speak with the judge about. I'll see you again when the trial reconvenes
Apollo: (Sung) Is what Gavin's saying right? Is there no other way to prove The innocence of Mr. Wright Is this how you should feel when you've Discovered who's the murderer? No. I just can not believe she is But Mr. Gavin seems so sure Should I listen to my words or his?
Phoenix: (Spoken) Hey there...uh, Apollo, right?
Apollo: (Spoken) Uh, Yes that's me
Phoenix: (Sung) I sense your aprehension So just pay close attention Whenever Olga lies she has a tell She holds onto her neck See it, you should inspect Use your perception your sure To excel And that can be The ace that's up your sleeve
*Phoenix says something and then leaves*
*Apollo says/sings somethings possibly*
*Trucy comes in and sings her verse and gives Apollo the bloody ace* And this will be the ace that's up your sleeve
I'm having a hard time coming up with anything for Trucy's verse here so if you have any thoughts I'd love to hear them
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Post by Madfox on May 12, 2016 15:46:11 GMT
I don't know what the melody was, but I tried to use 7 syllables a line like you did most of the time. I added in a little hint that the trump card is bad news in the fifth line, but Apollo would be too nervous to notice, I'd think.
Hello, sir. Please pick a card. (Apollo: It's an ace.) It's too late to drop your guard. The last hand is almost in, And that's your trump card to win. A parlor trick to even the score Play it, and the game is yours. Cut the deck and draw the truth. A magic girl believes in you. Daddy needs you, so let me be The ace that's up your sleeve!
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Post by Madfox on May 12, 2016 15:47:19 GMT
I'm picturing an Aladdin feel to this song haha
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Post by Lumos314 on May 13, 2016 1:33:47 GMT
Uh... So... I may have been fiddling around on the piano. And I may have come across a melody I really like. That may happen to be slow and somber and have a really weird rhythm. Which I think seems perfect for this song.
If you already have a melody for this, it's fine! But I really liked what you've got and so I kinda rewrote the lyrics you've already given us and made them fit my melody? Is that bad or is that alright?
I don't know proper etiquette for group musical writing. XD
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Post by Lumos314 on May 13, 2016 2:38:29 GMT
So, I, uh, finished the thing? I'll post the lyrics now, but I've gotta go upload the clip of me singing it onto the other computer, so that'll be up in a couple minutes. I was thinking some sort of Em/B - F#dim/C - Em/B - D chord progression... But I didn't really flesh that out at all.
If you wanna disregard all of this, please do! I just thought I'd throw it up here.
Kristoph:
(spoken) Well done, Justice. We've almost won.
(sung) The witness would like us to believe her lies But we two know better, don’t we, you and I? The crime she committed we must not let slide Orly don’t play so naive, you cannot hide
Of her murder, she’ll soon tell Accuse her — That’s how you’ll win And that’s the ace up your sleeve The ace up your sleeve
(spoken) Well, I have something to speak with the judge about. I’ll see you again when the trial reconvenes.
Apollo: Alright.
*footsteps*
(sung) The things Mr. Gavin says just can’t be right But I see no other way to win this fight Then why do I feel the truth is out of sight That there’s someone hiding what went on that night.
Phoenix: (spoken) Because I am.
Apollo: What?
Phoenix: I haven’t told anyone the Truth yet.
Apollo: Mr. Wright!
Phoenix: You’ll understand soon. But in the meantime…
(sung) You’re filled with a power that’s more than you know So attack whenever something seems to show When Orly is lying her unease only grows She will hold her neck as all those falsehoods flow
Use perception to excel Find the Truth — That’s how you’ll win And that’s the ace up your sleeve The ace up your sleeve
(spoken) We’re all counting on you. Me, Orly, my daughter…
*click*
Apollo: So that’s what’s inside the locket. Huh.
Phoenix: She is indeed.
*pause*
I’d better go see what Kristoph is up to. Trust yourself. Trust me.
*more footsteps*
Apollo: Trust myself…
Trucy: Excuse me?
(sung)
Please, sir, just go ahead and choose a card Don’t you know that it’s too late to drop your guard? The game’s heating up now, it’s about to get hard Tiny details you can’t bear to disregard
Parlor tricks could do you well Play this card — That’s how you’ll win And that’s the ace up your sleeve
Apollo: The ace up my sleeve
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Post by Kai on May 13, 2016 2:41:32 GMT
The Fifth Ace~~~ Ah, this looks cool. Of course, I've got no clue how you want it to sound.
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Post by Lumos314 on May 13, 2016 2:53:22 GMT
Here's the recording. Uh...I was aiming for a short song... and that didn't happen. But we can find a way to cut it if we need to. Again, don't feel like we have to use it!
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Post by apollojustice4all on May 13, 2016 22:23:15 GMT
Alright, I didn't get around to recording yesterday but I finally do have my original version of this song. This is just the most base form, it still doesn't even have the verses after Phoenix's one, but it is what i imagined as i was writing out the lyrics. Anyway here it is.
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Post by Madfox on May 20, 2016 3:42:02 GMT
I really like the idea of it speeding up as it progresses. I love your version of Kristoph, but maybe if Phoenix's was less somber and Trucy's was more chipper, it would work better.
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Post by Diana on May 21, 2016 15:07:28 GMT
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Post by Diana on May 21, 2016 15:09:43 GMT
Here's the recording. Uh...I was aiming for a short song... and that didn't happen. But we can find a way to cut it if we need to. Again, don't feel like we have to use it! I really love this melody, but I think you could pretty easily make it a more deliberate and fast paced without losing the feeling! I may play with this later today if you don't object.
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Post by Kai on May 21, 2016 16:50:54 GMT
I am literally so excited for this song. So excited I forgot to send a link of how the opening song sounded like to me. ... Whoops
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Post by apollojustice4all on May 23, 2016 15:00:08 GMT
I really like the idea of it speeding up as it progresses. I love your version of Kristoph, but maybe if Phoenix's was less somber and Trucy's was more chipper, it would work better. Did you have any ideas for like the notes for Phoenix's verse? Also Maybe I just suck at Forums because when I went to go back and relisten to what I posted here the link on this forum didn't work so I'm gonna try and put it here again just for reference drive.google.com/file/d/0B2MLlqSjqsUIZTI4NFo3Ql92eXM/view?usp=sharing
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Post by Madfox on May 31, 2016 1:42:35 GMT
DANG THAT'S ONE HECK OF A VOICE
I'm not 100% in love with the melody there though. It's kinda hard to follow. Lemme try and sing what's on my mind ahaha
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Post by Madfox on May 31, 2016 2:32:25 GMT
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Post by Kai on Jun 1, 2016 0:37:34 GMT
OOOOOOOOOH
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Post by Madfox on Jun 3, 2016 20:32:48 GMT
I dunno, apollo justice for all has a style that would fit very well into a musical. Lumos sounds gorgeous. Mine is fast enough. I wish we could combine that into something with aj4A's style, Lumos's melodies, and my speed.
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Post by Madfox on Jun 3, 2016 23:02:15 GMT
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Post by Madfox on Jun 8, 2016 19:38:34 GMT
So, uh... Any thoughts? I kinda tried to swirl everyone's ideas into one but I'm not so sure how that worked out.
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Post by Aznera on Jun 8, 2016 20:34:59 GMT
I think the chord sequence is really nice. The word placement is a bit odd in places, but that's not too much of an issue. the melody sounds really good imo. Overall I think it works well, has a kind of spooky/mysterious vibe going.
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Post by Kai on Jun 8, 2016 20:35:46 GMT
That happened with me and the opening. I would comment, but I can't read/play chords unless I have a guitar with me.
Ah, the perks of flunking theory. I am going to be a great music teacher, guys.
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Post by Madfox on Jun 9, 2016 0:30:44 GMT
Cool!
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Post by apollojustice4all on Jun 9, 2016 2:51:49 GMT
This sounds real great!!!
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Post by Lumos314 on Jun 9, 2016 4:40:20 GMT
Yes! This works! I'm impressed that we managed to combine all the craziness and wildly different ideas for this song into one thing.
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Post by Madfox on Jun 10, 2016 23:36:57 GMT
I was just trying really hard to get a diminished b chord in there. I am not entirely sure how well it worked. Diana or someone else can mess with that XD
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Post by Lumos314 on Jun 10, 2016 23:52:33 GMT
SAME THOUGH. XD
The only time I know I've seen a diminished chord work is in Fallen Down (Reprise) where it sounds beautiful and I can't find a way to work it in in any other setting. (I'm usually trying to work in the diminished 7 of the key...)
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Post by Madfox on Jun 11, 2016 14:00:19 GMT
*shrugs* I don't think there's a setting where they're supposed to work.
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Post by apollojustice4all on Jun 12, 2016 22:17:42 GMT
Going over the lyrics again, something about Phoenix's verse throws me. I feel like we need to have Phoenix Relate it to poker with The whole "tell" thing.
Also the line: She will hold her neck as all those falsehoods flow
Just doesn't sound right.
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Post by Lumos314 on Jun 12, 2016 23:31:34 GMT
Coming back to this, I agree. That was a weird line...
Also, I listened to it again, and I'd like to try to make a more fleshed out version of this, with a little bit of change in the melody so that it sounds more musical-esque. It's great as is, but thinking about it, it sounds more like a pop/rock song.
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Post by Lumos314 on Jun 12, 2016 23:32:13 GMT
Ack. I forgot to mention the most important part... I need to see those pictures again! I can't zoom in on the here.
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